Okay, so I'm having trouble creating dialogue in this scene I'm writing, more so on the girl's part and I think part of the problem is I have not broken her down into the details of have him. So I'm about to do the detail exercise again with her and hopefully this will get my creative juices flowing.

Name: Rachel
Sex: F
Height/Weight: 5'6"/150 lbs.
Physical: Unfit, slightly overweight
Age: 27
Religion: Christian (inactive)
Education: Business school
Birthplace: Grand Rapids, MI
Childhood home: Holland, MI
Marital Status: Single
Favorite food: Pizza
Hobbies: Playing video games, watching movies, playing with her cats, graphic designing
Fears: Spiders, snakes, arachnids, rodents, dark places
Pet Peeves: Public humiliation, strictness
Criminal Record: parking violation, speeding ticket - nothing serious
Job: Computer software office assistant
Friends: Other co-workers, a few best friends from high school
Pets: two cats
Habits: Biting nails, restless behavior, drinking coffee

That's all I have for her, I hope that helps me shape the conversation, although it seems to be taking the scene a different way than I had originally thought . . . my biggest problem right now is figuring out WHY they are in the office together this late at work. I keep thinking its involving him giving her a promotion or semi-interviewing her for one, but I don't know if I like that enough. I'm going to try to babble out some more stuff for the beginning of the scene.

*Lights up. GUY is sitting at the desk in his office looking over some papers. A knock at his door.*

GUY: Come in.

*RACHEL peeks her head in at first, then opens the door and comes in - she has two cups of coffee in her hands.

RACHEL: Your coffee, sir.

GUY: Please, call me Guy. We're all friends here. You can just set it there by the phone.

*Rachel sets down the coffee and turns to leave.

GUY: Rachel, would you like to join me for a minute?

*She stops and turns around surprised.

RACHEL: Uhh, sure.

GUY: Please close the door behind you.

RACHEL: Oh, yes.

*She quickly shuts the door behind her and offers a quick smile.

GUY: Please, sit down, relax. Forget convention for a few minutes. It's always nice to have a bit of R&R after a long day.

RACHEL: Okay.

*She shyly sits down and offers another smile

GUY: You know what, it's my Uncle's birthday today, let's celebrate. Do you like Scotch?

*GUY opens one of his drawers and pulls out two crystal glasses and a flask. He begins to pour the scotch into the two glasses

GUY: Do you take ice?

RACHEL: Oh, no thanks.

GUY: (as he hands her a glass) I always keep this handy for special occasions. Cheers.

*Long silence as they both drink

*Note: as the conversation continues, he keeps giving her more as she finishes, but he doesn't take more for himself. Also, it is important that she has limited eye contact with him.

GUY: You know, I've been looking over some files and time cards lately, and I noticed you've been taking extra long breaks. Also, you have taken three sick days in the last month, now . . .

*Rachel begins to protest, but he holds up a hand to stop her

GUY: This isn't a matter of excuses, it's a matter of efficiency. It's the matter of how we can both best do our jobs. You're a nice girl, Rachel, a pretty girl, but I didn't ask you here so I could fire you, so relax . . . by the way, I went fishing last weekend and I have some filleting to do, you don't mind if I do that while we talk?

RACHEL: No, not at all.

*From a cooler at the side of his desk, GUY pulls out a large fish and a fillet knife. He puts down a cutting board on his desk before he begins to work at the fish.

This next section is added only because I thought of it, and didn't want to forget it, but it is not directly connected to this section:

GUY: The wonderful thing about a filet knife is it's so . . . precise. So clean. Like it knows what it wants and knows how to get it done. It, of course, doesn't think, it just does what it needs to do.

I know I'm leaving it hanging, but that's it for now, perhaps the next entry will be the entire work pieced together and up as a first draft!